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- 学英语多年,却一直无法写出一篇200字没有低级错误的作文。
- 每次写作文就头疼,不知道如何下笔。
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原文:
I find that it is very difficult to use the App called Anki. Yesterday I spent tons of time studying this APP, still I could not figure it out. Sometimes I even doubted myself whether I was a clever man or not. The girl who taught me how to use Anki was very scrupulous, yet I only could use the basic function. I could really kick myself. Why am I so stupid? Alas, what a silly man I am. It seems that plans are made to be broken.
批改后:
I find it very difficult to use Anki, an App that claims to “make remembering things easy”. Yesterday I spent tons of time studying this App, but still I could not figure it out. It made me think whether I was too dumb. The girl who taught me how to use Anki tried to cover some advanced features, yet I was completely confused and could only use the basic functions. I could really kick myself. Why am I so stupid? I wasted too much time on Anki and failed to complete the day’s tasks. It seems that plans are made to be broken.
批改1:
- 原文:I find that it is very difficult to use the App called Anki.
- 修改:I find it very difficult to use Anki, an App that claims to “make remembering things easy”.
- 语法点1:find it + adj. to do sth. 发现做某事非常xxx。这个表达比find that it is + adj. to do sth. 更简洁。后者虽然是从句,但并不是表达这个意思的最佳方式。
- 语法点2:同位语。修改后的句子,an App that claims to xxx这部分是Anki的同位语。
• 什么是同位语?简单点说,如果A是B的同位语,那么A和B指的是同一个事物,而且位置可以互换。
• 比如:He is a giant, a man as tall as the Eiffel tower. 这句话里a giant和a man as tall as the Eiffel tower讲的都是这个人,我们可以将其位置互换。
• He is a man as tall as the Eiffel tower, a giant.
批改2:
- 原文:Yesterday I spent tons of time studying this APP, still I could not figure it out.
- 修改:Yesterday I spent tons of time studying this App, but still I could not figure it out.
- 语法点3:用连词连接两个独立句子!
•这句话中,逗号前后都是独立的句子。因此必须使用连词连接,常见的连词包括and/but/for/yet/so等,但still不是连词。
•不用连词的时候,中间要用句号分隔:
•Yesterday I spent tons of time studying this APP. Still I could not figure it out.
- 原文:The girl who taught me how to use Anki was very scrupulous, yet I only could use the basic function.
- 修改:The girl who taught me how to use Anki tried to cover some advanced features, yet I was completely confused and could only use the basic functions.
- 这句话作了较大改动,补充了细节,而不是试图用一个词来表达“悉心教导”的意思。
- 单词
•scrupulous是指“讲良心的、有道德的”。还有一个意思是“谨小慎微的”,用在这里不合适。
•cover 这里是不是物理意义上的“覆盖”,而是讲课内容“覆盖”了xxx。
•feature 这个词一般用来讲产品特征/功能。
训练营小助手:
以上就是今天的写作训练营讲解。我们重点讲解了:
- 连接词衔接两个独立句子
- 什么是同位语
- find it+ adj. + to do sth. 常用句型和 find that it is + adj. + to do sth. 从句结构的对比
- cover、feature、scrupulous三个常见单词的意思辨析。
- 写作时,如何通过细节强化表现力。
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